Zach+BC2

The dialogue in __The Sorceress__ is priceless. His dialogue that he uses between characters flows seamlessly and he fills most of it with clever wit that I love. Things that I noticed in comparison to our story __Linens are Forever__ was clearly the funny wit that is supposed to make people laugh. The only real problem is that i feel like our story doesn't have that seamless flow of conversation that Michael Scott shows. When you think characters in the story should be talking, chances are they should be talking. There were plenty of times in our story where our characters should have been talking. That speech is what sets a mood for the situation, and to get your point across you need to have the reader be in the mood your characters are going through. I think there was one thing we needed. More dialogue, The fact that our story is so short didn't really give us the space that a good story needs to really grow. The more dialogue you have the more a character can grow into the personality that you want them to have. If there is little dialogue, there is much to interpret.